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#1

Meein englisch ist leider nicht so gut und ich hab keine bekannten die mir helfen könnnen

Dear Mr.** and Ms.*** i will tell something about myself
My name is ** *** i am 15 years old , I was born in S**** m**** on 2* January
I have no brothers or sisters , my family is from turkey / capital city Ankara
We live 3 years in S**** then we move to F*****-B****
my father work as car salesman and my mother is housewife
My hobbies are Football I start with 7 years at TSV B**** 2 years ago my father became trainer.
2 Years i play , then the co trainer stopp my father had not enough time the team has dissolved
then i left to s*** K**** I have only played 1 month because i have problems at home
then i left to Sv Bonladen my first Match was vs Kickers we won 4:3 I had two goals score
i have play 3 years *** and my father sponsor the team . because of knee problems I have stopped play footbal
My other hobby is go out with friends , and play table tennis

I will talk about my Summer Holidays
Every Year we are flying to Turkey and Italia
1 week we stay in our house in The Capital City of turkey Ankara
1 week I stay with my grandparents in Izmit
and 2 weeks italia because our boutique

when I’m finished with school I open my own boutique in Pfortzheim the Golden city of Germany

könnt ihr mir noch tipps geben wie ich meine presentation verbessere , und ob ich örgendwelche fehler habe im text ?

#2

Es ist spät, aber ich fang mal an. Nur Fehlerbehebung, keine inhaltliche Korrektur:

Dear Mr.** and Ms.***

I will tell something about myself .

My name is ** *** . I am 15 years old, I was born in S****
edm**** on 2* Januar
I have no brothers or sisters, my family is from Turkey /
capital city Ankara

??
Du hast hier Stichwörter geschrieben, keine Sätze.
Also: My family is from Turkey. They come from the Turkish capital Ankara.

We live d for 3 years in S****, then we move d to F*****-B****
M y father work s as a car salesman and my mother is a housewife.
My hobbies are f ootball. I start ed to play when I was 7 years old with the local club , TSV B****
Two years ago my father became the trainer.
2 Years i play , then the co trainer stopp my father had not
enough time the team has dissolved

?? Ich verstehs nicht ganz. Vielleicht:
I played for two years. Then the co-trainer quit and as my father had not enough time the team was disbanded (müsste man irgendwie rumdrehen, damit ein anderes Verb benutzt werden kann).

Then I left to go to (?) s*** K****. I only played for one month because I
had problems at home
T hen I switched to Sv Bonladen. M y first Match was against Kickers . We
won 4:3 I scored two goals.

Ich geh jetzt ins Bett.
Vielleicht erbarmt sich jemand anderes. Vielleicht gibst du dir aber wenigstens selbst ein bisschen Mühe mit dem Text und überarbeitest ihn nochmal:
I wird immer groß geschrieben.
he/she/it - das S muss mit
die „past simple“-Form hat ein -d oder -ed am Ende bei regelmäßigen Verben.

Sangoma

#3

‚Vielleicht erbarmt sich jemand anderes‘ …
… schrieb Sangoma.
Ein Hilfesuchender, der sich so schnell wieder abmeldet, braucht kein Erbarmen.

Zack!
Pit