Business english - native speaker saught

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Hi,

a client of mine wants my business conditions in english.

Would you please be so kind as to check whether anything is completely off?
Conditions 2007
1.
Seminar Fee
per diem (10 am - 5.30 pm)
2.
Travel Days
per diem
3.
Charges / Expenses
per diem
(will not be brought to account if taken care of by ordering party; will otherwise be charged proportionally)
4.
Hotel Expenses
Hotel stay organised and paid for by ordering party
5.
Travel Expenses
Business Class flight. Travel expenses to and from airport
6.
Seminar Handouts / References
Detailed seminar handouts / references per participant and seminar (can be produced by ordering party; PDF file will be provided without charge)
7.
Logistics
Organisation and provision of powerful projector (to be connected to speaker’s own computer notebook at lectern)
8.
Payment
Due within 14 days after invoice being issued

Thanks a lot.

Burkhard

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native speaker saught - it’s spelled sought owt
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3

joh … sieht passabel aus

Hi,

a client of mine wants my business conditions in english.

Would you please be so kind as to check whether anything is
completely off?

Doesn’t seem too bad.

Conditions 2007
1.
Seminar Fee
per diem (10 am - 5.30 pm)
2.
Travel Days
per diem
3.
Charges / Expenses
per diem
(will not be brought to account if taken care of by ordering
party; will otherwise be charged proportionally)

oder einfacher?:
charged proportionate (anteilig, Klett Mattutat, Schöffler/Weis, 1978 :open_mouth:] ) if not paid (for) by ordering party

Hotel Expenses
Hotel stay organised and paid for by ordering party

würd’ ich kleines „will be“ einfügen:

Hotel stay will be organised and paid for by ordering party

um beim Lesen nich’ „Aufenthalt“ mit „bleiben“ zu verwechseln …

Travel Expenses
Business Class flight. Travel expenses to and from airport
6.
Seminar Handouts / References
Detailed seminar handouts / references per participant and
seminar (can be produced by ordering party; PDF file will be
provided without charge)

geht nich’?:
detailed free PDF-file

Logistics
Organisation and provision of powerful projector

hätte hier:
powerful projector provided. (to be [usw] …)
gesagt.
[Deutsch drückt alles in Hauptwörtern aus. Andere Sprachen sind ‚verbaler‘, nicht so Hauptwort-lastig. „Organisation and provision“ hört sich irgendwie ‚bombastisch‘ an, überbetont … is’ aber nich’ wirklich falsch, denk’ ich]

(to be connected to speaker’s own computer notebook at lectern)

at lectern sacht mir gar nix, wird wohl stimmen ;O]

Payment
Due within 14 days after invoice being issued

Thanks a lot.

Burkhard

nach meinem halbwissen scheint alles zu stimmen … könnt’ aber ruhig nochmal einer mit (kfm.-engl.) vollwissen 'ran :open_mouth:]