Hallo, ich habe vor kurzem ein Praktikum absolviert und muss jetzt für meinen Englisch Lehrer einen Kurztext über das Praktikum schreiben. ich habe hier ein Text geschrieben , könnte jemand da mal drüber schauen,und eventuell mir sagen wo ich fehler gemacht habe , weil wir noten bekommen und ich dringend eine gute note brauche… DRINGEND 
I have one week time in the kindergarten ST. Konrad in Metternich to get experiences about the job kindergarten teacher. Mrs. Linke helps me if I had questions. She is very nice and helpful. At first she shows me the kindergarten (all rooms) after that I get a class with little children. All children like me directly, because I play with they all the time. Moreover , some little girls wants that I draw a heart or a butterfly for her mum. One day we make together a castle of paper. That was great! All girls play with the castle. For my part, I can say I have a lot of fun and I have learning very much. I´m very lucky that I get a view of the job kindergarten teacher. In addition to that, it should never be forgotten that children in this age are very lovely and nice. And we have to show the right way for they life, because they are our future . Vielen Dank euch im Voraus!!
Könntest du evtl nochmal auf deutsch schreiben, was du denn mit „Konrad in Metternich to get experiences about the job kindergarten teacher.“ aussagen möchtest? Den Text, der da steht, verstehe ich so nicht
Hallo askar194, habe leider derzeit gar keinen Raum für eine Korrektur. Nur soviel: Du solltest die Verben, die die Vergangenheit betreffen, auch alle in die Vergangenheitsform setzen = die 2. Verbform, z.B. bei „haben“ (to have - had - had) eben „had“ und nicht „have“ verwenden.
Alles Gute!
Caroline
Hallo askar,
ich will mal versuchen, möglichst genau bei deiner Vorlage zu bleiben, auch wenn ich nicht immer ganz sicher bin, was gemeint ist…
I have one week
time in the kindergarten ST. Konrad in Metternich to get
experiences about the job kindergarten teacher.
–> During my one week internship in the kindergarden St. Konrad in Metternich I gained experience as a kindergarten teacher.
Mrs. Linke
helps me if I had questions. She is very nice and helpful.
–> Whenever I had questions, Mrs Linke helped me. She was very nice and helpful.
At
first she shows me the kindergarten (all rooms) after that I
get a class with little children.
–> At first she showed me the kindergarten with all its rooms. After that I got a class on my own.
All children like me
directly, because I play with they all the time.
–> I played with the children all the time and they all liked me.
Moreover ,
some little girls wants that I draw a heart or a butterfly for
her mum.
–> Some little girls even wanted me to draw a heart or a butterfly for their mums.
One day we make together a castle of paper. That was
great! All girls play with the castle.
–> Moreover we built a paper castle together. That was great! All girls played with the castle.
For my part, I can say
I have a lot of fun and I have learning very much.
–> I had a lot of fun and I also learned a lot.
I´m very
lucky that I get a view of the job kindergarten teacher.
I am very glad that I got the chance to work as a kindergarten teacher.
In
addition to that, it should never be forgotten that children
in this age are very lovely and nice.
–> I think we all should never forget how lovely and nice little children are.
And we have to show the
right way for they life, because they are our future
–> And we have to show them how things work and how they have to behave, because they are our future.
Der letzte Teil entspricht nicht ganz deinen Vorgaben, ich hoffe, es passt so.
Viel Erfolg damit!
LG sabine
Hi askar194,
den Text habe ich mal durchgesehen. Immer Vorsicht mit den Zeiten! Ich habe jetzt einfach mal ein paar Stellen geändert und einen einheitlichen Text daraus gemacht, sowie einige Formulierungen verändert um es insgesamt flüssiger zu gestalten.
Da es dir anscheinend nur um die „gute Note“ geht, werde ich mal keine Anmerkungen hinzufügen, was wo aus welchem Grund falsch war.
Anbei der durchgesehene Text:
I have one week time in the kindergarten St. Konrad in Metternich to gather experience about the job kindergarten teacher. Mrs. Linke helps me when I have questions. She is very nice and helpful. At first she shows me the kindergarten (all rooms) after that I get a class with little children. All children like me instantly, because I play with them all the time. Moreover, one little girl wants me to draw a heart or a butterfly for her mum. One day we built a castle of paper together. That was great! All girls played with the castle. For my part, I can say that I had a lot of fun and I have been learning very much. I feel very lucky for the opportunity to get a view on the job kindergarten teacher. In addition, it should never be forgotten that children in this age are very lovely and nice. And we have to show them the right way for their lives, because they are our future.
greets,
Solanum
Ich hatte jetzt nur kurz Zeit, aber hier mal mein Vorschlag. Ich bin sicher, dass man es noch besser machen kann.
I have one week time in the kindergarten St. Konrad in Metternich to get experiences about the job kindergarten teacher. Mrs. Linke helped me when I had questions. She is a very nice and helpful person. At first she showed me all rooms of the kindergarten, thereafter I had to take care of a class of little children. Immediately all children liked me, because I played with them all the time. Moreover, some little girls wanted me to draw a heart or a butterfly for their mums. One day we constructed a paper castle together. That was great! All girls played with the castle. For my part, I can say that I had a lot of fun and I learned very much. I’m very lucky that I got a view on the job „kindergarten teacher“. In addition to that, it should never be forgotten that children at this age are very lovely and nice. And we have to show to them the right way for their life, because they are our future.
Ich habe schon meine ersten Fehler entdeckt. Der erste Satz muss lauten:
I spent one week at the St.Konrad kindergardent to learn about the job of a kindergarden teacher.