Kann sich jemand meinen Text mal durchlesen?

Ich muss in Englisch nächste Woche etwas zu dem Buch „Thirteen Reasons Why“ von Jay Asher abgeben.

Ich habe niemanden der sich den Text nochmal durchlesen könnte und fürs Korrektur lesen zu bezahlen obwohl es ja keine Diplomarbeit oder so ist möchte ich auch nicht.

Der Text muss nicht genau korrigiert werden. Nur vielleicht die Rechtschreibung und Kommasetzung ein bisschen.

Das wäre echt total lieb

Hier ist er:

  1. Bibliography

The book “Thirteen Reasons Why“ is written by Jay Asher and it was published in 2007 by Razorbill, an imprint for young adult novels.

  1. General information

The book “Thirteen Reasons Why” is a pocketbook and on the layout is a girl and a short description that bares that the book is about someone who commits suicide and that there are thirteen people who are jointly responsible for his or her death.

  1. Information about the author

Jay Asher was born on 30th september 1975 in California, Arcadia. At the moment he is living in California, Nipomo with his wife Joan Marie Asher. They are going to get a baby in a few months and want to name the boy Isaiah.
Jay Asher is novelist for young adult novels but he has also written picture books and middle grade humour novels. Now he is working on his second young adult novel. First Asher wanted to get elementary school teacher. After the high school and the college he went to the Polytechnic State University and studied to get school teacher. But in his senior year he left to be serious writer. In addition to his work as novelist he also worked as salesman in a bookstore, a library and a shoestore.
The idea for his book came when he made a self-guided audiotour in the museum. There he received a walkman with earbuds. When he stood in front of a display he pressed “play” and a womans voice explained what he saw.
But the final decision for the book came when a friend of Asher tried to kill herself. He discussed with her why she wanted to end her life and then decided to write a book about the theme suicide.

  1. Summary

The book “Thirteen Reasons Why” is about the girl Hannah Baker and her classmate and crush Clay Jensen.
One day when Clay Jensen comes home from school he finds a mysterious box with his name on it on his porch. The box has no return address. When Clay opens the box he finds seven cassettetapes recorded by Hannah Baker. Two weeks before Hannah commits suicide she records thirteen reasons why she decides to end her life. These thirteen reasons are thirteen people and Clay is one of them.
One whole night Clay spends to listen to the tapes and to find out what happens with Hannah. A few weeks before he also gets a anonymous map. On this map of the town where Hannah and Clay live are several points. Each point belongs to a new story and so also to one of the thirteen persons. While Clay listens to the tapes he visits the places from the map.
Hannahs story begins with her first kiss in the Eisenhowerpark. After the kiss the boy put some rumours about Hannah, for example that he touches her breast. Then a past friend publishes a “Who is hot / Who is not” list and Hannah was the “Best Ass”. Thereon a boy grabs her ass in a pub to see if it is right. It follows that her friend Jessica breaks off their friendship because she thinks Hannah has a romance with her crush. After that a Peeping Tom observes her in her bedroom and takes pictures of her. Hannah begins to suffer because she looses her friends and her privacy get violate. Again and again she trusts the people and gets disappointed.
Her story goes on with a girl who only uses her to polishing up her image and her Valentine Marcus who paws her at a diner. She can’t defend herself and noone at the diner helps her. Then in “Peer Communication” her favourite class her privacy get violated again. In that class the students discuss problems and have paperbags where other students can leave them notes. At that time Hanna is hard up. She needs the notes to get the hope that she can trust the people but a boy steals the notes.
Hannah begins to write down her problems in poems. She trusts a boy and shows them to him. Without her permission he publishes the poems in the whole school and the teachers analyse them with the students in class.
Then it’s Clays turn but Hannah explains that he is only on the tapes to make him understand why she ends her life.
It follows the most terrible night of her life. At a party she spends a lot of time with Clay. But when he leaves she must watch how a boy rapes another girl. Her body feels so numb that she can’t do anything against what she sees. One week later the same boy rapes Hannah and after that her mind is make up. She only gives a teacher one last chance to help her but he fails. He advises her to move on and get over what happens. So Hannah gives up and ends her life.

  1. Personal statement
    First I thought that the book could be a little bit strange because of the fact that a girl recorded tapes to explain why she killed herself. But the layout made the book also very exciting. I wanted to know what happens in the book. First when I was reading it it was a little bit difficult to switch so often between Clay and Hannah. But nach kurzer Zeit it was no more a problem and then I could hardly stop reading. It was so interesting and fesselnd especially that the book aufwerfen a lot of questions.
    The language was easy and Hannahs story was explained very lively. The book made me think a lot of what happened and why it took so much hold of me. I thought about how easy I can affect other peoples life without regognizing it and that such little things can destroy a life. Hannahs story and how she told it made me sad and sometimes angry when I read what the others did to her. I mitleiden with Hannah and also Clay.
    I think the theme suicide is an interesting and also very important theme. The theme is aktuell because it’s alltäglich that someone get mobbed or think of suicide. The book shows what realy happens at the schools all over the world. From the book you learn that it’s important to do something against it suicide.
    I would really recommend the book especially to people who like serious themes. The easy language and the fact that it plays in school is perfect for young adults. But it’s also very important to see the Ernsthaftigkeit in the book.

Hallo Lara,

hier kommt der korrigierte Text. Falls du eine Word-Fassung davon brauchst, kannst du mich auch direkt anmailen: [email protected]. Dann schick’ ich dir den Text zu. (Hört sich spannend an, das Buch :wink:
Viele Grüße & viel Erfolg
Sigrid

  1. Bibliography

The book “Thirteen Reasons Why“ is written by Jay Asher and it was published in 2007 by Razorbill, an imprint for young adult novels.

  1. General information

The book “Thirteen Reasons Why” is a pocketbook and on the layout is a girl and a short description that bares that the book is about someone who commits suicide and that there are thirteen people who are jointly responsible for his or her death.

  1. Information about the author

Jay Asher was born on 30th September 1975 in California, Arcadia. At the moment he is living in California, Nipomo with his wife Joan Marie Asher. They are going to get a baby in a few months and want to name the boy Isaiah. Jay Asher is novelist for young adult novels but he has also written picture books and middle grade humour novels. Now he is working on his second young adult novel. First Asher wanted to become a elementary school teacher. After the high school and the college he went to the Polytechnic State University and studied pedagogics. But in his senior year he turned to serious writing… In addition to his work as a novelist he also worked as salesman in a bookstore, a library and a shoe store. The idea for his book came when he made a self-guided audiotour in the museum. There he received a walkman with earbuds. When he stood in front of a display he pressed “play” and a woman’s voice explained what he saw. But the final decision for the book came when a friend of Asher tried to kill herself. He discussed with her why she wanted to end her life and then decided to write a book about the theme suicide.

  1. Summary

The book “Thirteen Reasons Why” is about the girl Hannah Baker and her classmate and crush Clay Jensen. One day when Clay Jensen comes home from school he finds a mysterious box with his name on it on his porch. The box has no return address. When Clay opens the box he finds seven cassette tapes recorded by Hannah Baker. Two weeks before Hannah commits suicide she records thirteen reasons, why she decides to end her life. These thirteen reasons are thirteen people and Clay is one of them. One whole night Clay spends to listen to the tapes and to find out what happens with Hannah. A few weeks before he also gets an anonymous map. (UNVOLLSTÄNDIGER, UNVERSTÄNDLICHER SATZ!)
On this map of the town where Hannah and Clay live are several points. Each point belongs to a new story and so also to one of the thirteen persons. While Clay listens to the tapes he visits the places from the map. Hannah’s story begins with her first kiss in the Eisenhower Park. After the kiss the boy put some rumours about Hannah, for example that he touched her breast. Then a past friend publishes a “Who is hot / Who is not” list and Hannah was the “Best Ass”. Thereon a boy grabs her ass in a pub to see if it is right. It follows that her friend Jessica breaks off their friendship because she thinks Hannah has a romance with her crush. After that a Peeping Tom observes her in her bedroom and takes pictures of her. Hannah begins to suffer because she looses her friends and her privacy gets violate. Again and again she trusts the people and gets disappointed. Her story goes on with a girl who only uses her to polish up her image and her Valentine Marcus who paws her at a diner. She can’t defend herself and nobody at the diner helps her. Then in “Peer Communication” in her favourite class her privacy gets violated again. In that class the students discuss problems and have paperbags where other students can leave them notes. At that time Hanna is hard up. She needs the notes to get the hope that she can trust the people but a boy steals the notes.

Hannah begins to write down her problems in poems. She trusts a boy and shows them to him. Without her permission he publishes the poems in the whole school and the teachers analyse them with the students in class. Then it’s Clay’s turn but Hannah explains that he is only on the tapes to make him understand why she ends her life.It follows the most terrible night of her life. At a party she spends a lot of time with Clay. But when he leaves she must watch how a boy rapes another (??? Another = noch ein) girl. Her body feels so numb that she can’t do anything against what she sees. One week later the same boy rapes Hannah and after that her mind is made up. She only gives a teacher one last chance to help her but he fails. He advises her to move on and get over what happens. So Hannah gives up and ends her life.

  1. Personal statement
    First I thought that the book could be a little bit strange because of the fact that a girl recorded tapes to explain why she killed herself. But the layout made the book also very exciting. I wanted to know what happens in the book. First when I was reading it, it was a little bit difficult to switch so often between Clay and Hannah. But after a short while it was no more a problem and then I could hardly stop reading. It was so interesting and exciting, especially that the book causes such a lot of questions.

The language is easy to understand and Hannah’s story was explained very lively. The book made me think a lot of what happened and why it took so much hold of me. I thought about how easy everybody can affect other peoples’ life without recognizing it and that such little things can destroy a life. Hannah’s story and how she told it, made me sad and sometimes angry, when I read how she was hurt. I suffered a lot with
Hannah and also Clay. I think the theme suicide is an interesting and also very important theme. The theme is up-to-date, because it’s meanwhile common that someone gets mobbed or thinks of suicide. The book shows what really happens at the schools all over the world.

From the book you learn that it’s important to do something against it suicide. I would really recommend the book especially to people who like serious themes. The easy language and the fact that it plays in school is perfect for young adults. But it’s also very important to see the sobriety in the book.

Vielen Dank =)
Es ist auch wirklich total spannend.
Sollte man auf jeden Fall mal lesen

Grüße Lara

und wie bitte soll ich das korrekturlesen?

ich brauche den text als .doc und dann kucke ich mir das mal an.

liebe grüsse

karin

Hallo, tut mir leid, aber ich lese nur deutsche Texte Korrektur. Mein Schulenglisch reicht dafür nicht aus.

Hallo,
könnten sie sich vielleicht auch noch meine Analyse zu dem Buch durchlesen.
Einfach mal schnell drüberlesen.
Wichtig wäre nur, ob ich die richtige Zeit benutzt habe und ob die Sätze einen Sinn haben

Das wäre echt toll

  1. Analysis of the book

The title “Thirteen Reasons Why” is a very exciting title because the first question that comes up is: “Thirteen reasons for what?”.
But the short description on the cover immediately clears up the question. Someone died and there are thirteen reasons why.
The storyline is also very interesting. A girl explains on casstettetapes why she want to kill herself and her classmate and crush Clay listens to the tapes. She tells her hole story and Clay and the reader come to know every terrible reason that cause to her decision to end her life.
Although a tipical young adult slang is visible the book has all the same an easy language and it is understandable for everyone. Furthermore it has an perfect length, not too long and not to short.
That the book is written from Hannah’s and Clay’s point of view makes the book very attractive. It isn’t confusing. Hannah makes the book lively and Clay shows immediately a reaction to what Hannah says. It begins with the end of the story when Clay has already listened to the tapes and is swift to send the tapes to the next one. Then the book switches in time and it follows the past when Clay listens to the tapes.
With every new story of Hannahs life the suspence and the terribility rises until the climax, her rape and the decision to end her life.
Exeptional in the book is that Hannah isn’t the typical victim for bullying. Hannah is pretty. She has friends and a lot of boys who want to go out with her. But the rumors are not the popularity Hannah wants.
Also exeptional is that for Hannah the people are not culprits but jointly responsible. They misunderstand the signs from Hannah and they don’t notice what they do. So Hannah don’t blame an individual one, she even forgive them all and admits that she also bears the blame. For example when she watches how a girl get rapped and she does nothing against it.
The book “Thirteen Reasons Why” is about the themes first love, mixed emotions and sucide. It addresses young adults because this themes are common for them and it gives reason to identificate with Hannah or Clay. But the most important fact for being perfect for young adults is that they can understand the most how the people in the book feel because their life is similar.
The theme suicide is a theme that is hardly discussed. So the author Jay Asher want to call attention to it and want to unfold the reasons for suicide. The book shows the consequences of your own acting. That often only your impression puts someone into a special role. It shows how every action you make can affect another peoples life and that you often don’t even noticing it.
Furthermore the book shows with Hannah how it comes to suicide. That it begins with littles things and like a snowballeffect it causes to terrible things. And that the rage of the victim anytime turns against him or herself.
The theme suicide is described very clearly. The victim tells the problem and the way to suicide on her own and at the same time there is someone who learns from what she tells and from what happened with her.
The moral of the book is to identify when a person is at high risk of suicide and to avert the suicide. It is important to pay attention to what you say and do to others and to understand to what your behavior can lead.
On one side the book brings out sadness and angriness for the reader but on the other side also hope. Hope that stories like Hannah’s can get avert.

  1. Analysis of Hannah and Clay

6.1 Hannah

On one side Hannah is very sensitive and she wants the others to respect her personality and to notice her sensibility. She aches for closeness and trust but the rumours only reduce her to her body.
She recognises what happens with her, that piques her and causes to a depression. Again and again she trusts the people and gets disappointed which causes to self-pity. She gives herself up and finally it leads to her suicide.
But on the other side Hannah is also very unjustly. It is terrible what happened with her but sometimes she says sentences which were very unfair. Moreover it is very unfair on Clay that Hannah hadn’t give him or anyone else the chance to help her. She distance herself from the others and wallows in self-pity. No one recognizes her despair and she didn’t ask for help.

6.2 Clay

Clay makes a very big change in the book. First when he starts to listen to the tapes he is totally helpless. He don’t know what to do. He don’t know why he is on the list and to hear Hannah’s voice and her story makes him sad and desperately. It makes him cry to hear what happened with Hannah and that he can hear her voice one last time after her death.
Then when Clay listens to the stories he gets very angry about what the people did to Hannah. Furthermore he reproaches himself that he doesn’t helped and stopped her from killing herself.
But at the end he learns from what he hears and from what happened with Hannah. He knows that he must pay attention to what he does and that he must try to recognize when a friend is suicidal.

Hallo Lara,

ich habe meine Bachelorarbeit bei http://www.lektorat-bachelorarbeit.de lektorieren lassen. Das Ergebnis war sehr gut und ich habe ziemlich gutes Feedback von meinem Professor bekommen (insbesondere auch für die so gute Ausdrucksweise :wink:). Ich bin mir sicher, dass das von Freunden (oder gar Fremden) korrekurlesen lassen doch nicht wirklich was bringen kann. Wer hat schon Lust sich einen Tag und mehr mit einer fremden Arbeit auseinander zu setzen. Abgesehen davon, dass Freunde einfach auch keine Lektoren sind. Für mich war das eine der besten Entscheidungen im letzten Jahr!