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Hallo!
Ich habe zu morgen eine charakterisierung zu Vern Tessio aus dem Buch The Body von Stephen King zu schreiben, da ichg aber nicht sehr gut in Englisch bin ( sogar sehr schlecht) würde ich mich freuen wenn jemand meine charakterisierung korrigieren könnte. Ich freue mich über jede Hilfe !!
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Lilly

Vern Tessio
Vern Tessio is 12 years old and lives in Castle Rock. He has a older brother named Billy. Vern think that his brother is very stupid and so he hated him. His older brother Billy is a member of Ace Merill´s gang. Vern has dark eyes in his sweaty face and he´s listening to pop music. He is about equal in intelligence. Vern´s dad worked at a factory in town. Vern is a member of a gang. The other members are Teddy Duchamp, Chris Chambers and Gordie Lachance. He spend his days in the lirttle tree house. Vern has never seen a dead body. Vern is very young and athletic. He run to the tree houses. He also is very sympathetic and nice. Vern usuallye use teenagespeech and often normal speech. He is open and cryazy. Vern is one of the main character. He likes adventures more than anyone of his gang does.He´s from a bad famtly amd enjoys smoking cigarettes.

Vern died in a house fire.

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Hi!

Ich habe einige Fehler korrigiert, welche Klasse bist Du denn?

Vern Tessio is 12 years old and lives in Castle Rock. He has an older brother called Billy. Vern thinks that his brother is very stupid and so he hates him. His older brother Billy is a member of Ace Merill’s gang. Vern has dark eyes in a sweaty face and he listens to pop music. He is about equal in intelligence. (mit wem?) Vern’s dad works at a factory in the town. Vern is a member of a gang. The other members are Teddy Duchamp, Chris Chambers and Gordie Lachance. He spends his days in the little tree house. Vern has never seen a dead body. Vern is very young and athletic. He runs to the tree house. He also is very pleasant and nice. Vern usually uses teenage-speech and often normal speech. He is open and crazy. Vern is one of the main characters. He likes adventures more than anyone else of his gang does. He’s from a bad family and enjoys smoking cigarettes.