Letter of Motivation (englisch)

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1

Hallo zusammen,
ich bin im moment dabei einen letter of motivation zu schreiben. Es geht dabei um eine Bewerbung für ein Auslandssemester in Hong Kong oder den USA. (wir durften uns 3 Ziele raussuchen für die wir uns bewerben). Ich studiere momentan in Holland Tourismus Management.

Es wäre schön wenn ihr mir ein paar Verbesserungsvorschläge geben könntet.

hier noch ein paar Infos bezüglich der Vorgaben des letters:

This letter does not only need to cover your motivation, but also your personal qualities and
abilities to function in an international setting, an explanation of your motivation, your academic &
personal development, your knowledge of destination, your plans for the future, why you are the right
candidate to represent NHTV. Be sure to spend time thinking seriously about your motivation!
This will show us how carefully you have considered why such a period abroad is important for you!
The letter should be printed on A4 paper and have no more than 2 pages nor exceed 750 words.

Nun schlussendlich zu meinem Text (es ist die erste version):

Dear Mr. Bravo Madrid,

with this letter I would like to express my motivation for going on an exchange to one of the three chosen destinations within Hong Kong and the United States of America. The brochure and the experience reports, as well as the presentation given by you were sources of great interest to me and were very helpful for making the right destination choice.
As a foreign first year student of international tourism and leisure management I already had the chance to experience studying and living within a foreign environment. It showed me, how important it is to be open minded but also that there is interest in the country and culture I come from. This exchange of differences and knowledge was and still is one of the main factors influencing my personality and my abilities. Being able to deal with an international atmosphere and to use this atmosphere to your advantage instead of letting it slow you down is a skill I was able to develop, not only for group assignments but also for my daily life within the Netherlands and anywhere else. I learned that listening to different points of views and sharing these largely contributes to the work we do and that it is as important as being able to work individually, which is another strength I was able to develop further.
All this can directly be linked to my motivation for going on exchange.

Within the tourism industry, every single international experience you make is an advantage, as it helps you to widen your horizon. Knowing about different trends and different approaches regions, countries or even continents and their schools take towards tourism is essential in this globally linked market.
On the other hand it is also important to be informed about the cultural differences that might influence the tourism industry and as cross cultural studies, a course that is also offered by NHTV, is of big interest to me, I not only see it as a chance to get a first hand experience but also as a chance to bring my experiences back to Breda to share them with my fellow students.
For my personal and academic future I want to develop the skills, knowledge and behaviors that are necessary to perform as a confident, independent person and as an active learner who is able to work individually as well as in groups. The NHTV and the three schools of my choice all provide the perfect foundation for that, as they demand a problem solving way of working and give you the chance to apply what you learn in classroom.

Choosing Hong Kong and the United States of America as my destinations followed the fact, that they both are very important market players within tourism.
The continent of Asia sees the 2nd most tourist arrivals worldwide, right after Europe. What makes it even more important is the very high growth rate of over 10% which makes it the 2nd fastest growing destination.
Another reason for me to choose Hong Kong as my top destination is Asia’s leading edge position in the aviation market, which I want to specialize on during my studies.
With carriers like Singapore Airlines, Asia was able to set new standards and trends.
On the other hand the United States of America are within the top 3 when it comes to tourism expenditures and the number of outbound tourists created which gives them an undeniable strength within the market.
This shows that I see my future in tourism within an international surrounding, preferably in the aviation industry.

Going on exchange is not a one-sided process. It is not only about getting new experiences yourself, it is also about sharing your experiences with others.
I am very keen on giving my future fellow students an insight into my culture and knowledge to let them profit from my presence. I am also very keen on satisfying the exchange institution as well as the NHTV. I will achieve that with high commitment and by showing that I can relate to people easily and that I can adapt to new surroundings quickly.

An exchange to one of my chosen destinations will enhance my profile and I look forward to hear from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Fabio Baum

2

Hallo,

viel Zeit habe ich nicht,
ich fang einfach mal an, vielleicht kann dann jemand weiter machen.
Ich gehe auch nur Satz für Satz darauf ein, fürs Gesamte fehlt mir im Moment die Zeit.

Dear Mr. Bravo Madrid,

with this letter I would like to express my motivation for
going on an exchange to one of the three chosen destinations
within Hong Kong and the United States of America.

  1. With this letter … es wird, trotz dem Komma nach der Anrede, großgeschrieben.
  2. Im Übrigen solltest du dich entscheiden, ob du englisches Englisch oder amerikansiches schreiben willst. Im Englischen kommt hinter Mr kein Punkt (Regel: hört die Abkürzung mit dem gleichen Buchstaben auf wie das ausgeschriebene Wort, kommt kein Punkt, also Mr, Dr, etc. aber etc., abbr.). Es sollte aber einheitlich sein, d.h. abweichende Rechtschreibung sollte aus einer Version der Sprache kommen.
  3. „With this letter“ ist kein schöner Anfang. Natürlich machst du es in diesem Brief. Weglassen.

The
brochure and the experience reports, as well as the
presentation given by you were sources of great interest to me
and were very helpful for making the right destination choice.

  1. Kürzer: I read with great interest …

As a foreign first year student of international tourism and
leisure management I already had the chance to experience
studying and living within a foreign environment.

  1. As a first year student of […] – das „foreign“ klingt an dieser Stelle nicht gut, erwähne die Uni an der du bist.
  2. hier within = in

It showed
me, how important

  1. kein Komma
  2. „it showed me“ --> I realised how important

it is to be open minded

  1. openminded (one word)

but also that there
is interest in the country and culture I come from.

  1. there exists a considerable amount of interest in my own culture.

Sorry, und jetzt muss ich aufhören.

Gruß
Elke

3

  1. „With this letter“ ist kein schöner Anfang. Natürlich machst du es in diesem Brief. Weglassen.
    Ich habe es durch Hereby ersetzt. Wenn ich direkt mit I would like… anfange klingt das meiner Meinung nach auch nicht schön.

  2. As a first year student of […] – das „foreign“ klingt an dieser Stelle nicht gut, erwähne die Uni an der du bist.
    Ich muss mich bei meiner eigenen Uni für den exchange bewerben. Da die tatsache dass ich hier ein foreign student bin für die folgenden sätze sehr wichtig ist werde ich das so lassen.

Hier jetzt mal die geänderte Version:

Dear Mr. Bravo Madrid,

Hereby I would like to express my motivation for going on an exchange to one of the three chosen destinations within Hong Kong and the United States of America. I read the exchange brochure and the experience reports with great interest and together with the presentation given by you it was possible for me to make a clear and appropriate destination choice.
As a foreign first year student of international tourism and leisure management I already had the chance to experience studying and living in a foreign environment. It showed me how important it is to be open-minded but also that a considerable amount of interest in the country and culture I come from exists. This exchange of differences and knowledge was and still is one of the main factors influencing my personality and my abilities. Being able to deal with an international atmosphere and to use this atmosphere to your advantage instead of letting it slow you down is a skill I was able to develop, not only for group assignments but also for my daily life within the Netherlands and anywhere else. I learned that listening to different points of views and sharing these largely contributes to the work we do and that it is as important as being able to work individually, which is another strength I was able to develop further.
All this can directly be linked to my motivation for going on exchange.

Within the tourism industry, every single international experience you make is an advantage, as it helps you to widen your horizon. Knowing about different trends and different approaches regions, countries or even continents and their schools take towards tourism is essential in this globally linked market.
On the other hand it is also important to be informed about the cultural differences that might influence the tourism industry and as cross cultural studies, a course that is also offered by NHTV, is of big interest to me, I not only see it as a chance to get a first hand experience but also as a chance to bring my experiences back to Breda to share them with my fellow students.
For my personal and academic future I want to develop the skills, knowledge and behaviors that are necessary to perform as a confident, independent person and as an active learner who is able to work individually as well as in groups. The NHTV and the three schools of my choice all provide the perfect foundation for that, as they demand a problem solving way of working and give you the chance to apply what you learn in classroom.
Choosing Hong Kong and the United States of America as my destinations followed the fact, that they both are very important market players within tourism.
The continent of Asia sees the 2nd most tourist arrivals worldwide, right after Europe. What makes it even more important is the very high growth rate of over 10% which makes it the 2nd fastest growing destination.
Another reason for me to choose Hong Kong as my top destination is Asia’s leading edge position in the aviation market, which I want to specialize on during my studies.
With carriers like Singapore Airlines, Asia was able to set new standards and trends.
On the other hand the United States of America are within the top 3 when it comes to tourism expenditures and the number of outbound tourists created which gives them an undeniable strength within the market.
This shows that I see my future in tourism within an international surrounding, preferably in the aviation industry.

Going on exchange is not a one-sided process. It is not only about getting new experiences yourself, it is also about sharing your experiences with others.
I am very keen on giving my future fellow students an insight into my culture and knowledge to let them profit from my presence. I am also very keen on satisfying the exchange institution as well as the NHTV. I will achieve that with high commitment and by showing that I can relate to people easily and that I can adapt to new surroundings quickly.

An exchange to one of my chosen destinations will enhance my profile and I look forward to hear from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

4

Hi,

wie auch eklaastic habe ich nciht die Zeit, mich um jedes DEtail zu kümmern, aber vielleicht hilft es.

Dear Mr. Bravo Madrid,

Hereby I would like to express my motivation for going on an
exchange to one of the three chosen destinations within Hong
Kong and the United States of America.

Sag nicht, was du tun willst - tu s einfach. Dieser komplette Satz ist überflüssig. Fang mit dem nächsten an, ich zeige Dir auch, wie man das I am Anfang vermeidet:

I read the exchange
brochure and the experience reports with great interest and
together with the presentation given by you it was possible
for me to make a clear and appropriate destination choice.

your exchange brochure and the experience reports have been of great interest to me, and having seen your presentation I am convinced to have made the right decision for me.

  • klein anfangen, hat Elke ja shcon gesagt
  • have been und have made, weil der Vorgang in der Vergangenheit geschah und jetzt einen Einfluss auf deine Entscheidung hat.
  • Ob die Entscheidung appropriate ist, entscheidet ein Dritter jetzt oder du selber im Nachhinein.
  • mein text klingt, als ob du zuerst gelesen und dan den Vortrag gehört hast. Wenn das nciht ichtig ist, drehs rum.

As a foreign first year student of international tourism and
leisure management I already had the chance to experience
studying and living in a foreign environment. It showed me how
important it is to be open-minded but also that a considerable
amount of interest in the country and culture I come from
exists.

  • I have already had, … It has shown … Begründung wie oben
    Ich würde hier noch was einfügen, was Bezug auf diese spezielle Universität nimmt(interest … existis in [your country) - du wilst DORt hin, weil du DORT gewohnt hast und die Leute dir DORT gefallen.

This exchange of differences and knowledge was and
still is one of the main factors influencing my personality
and my abilities.

  • exchange of differences? was bedeutet das? weglassen. Auch das mit den Fähigkeiten.

Being able to deal with an international
atmosphere and to use this atmosphere to your advantage
instead of letting it slow you down is a skill I was able to
develop, not only for group assignments but also for my daily
life within the Netherlands and anywhere else.

  • Working in an international atmosphere (sonst klingt es "is zwar doof und macht keinen Spaß, aber ich kann’s…)
    -and benefitting from this atmosphere is a skill I have been able to develop … muss die Struktur verändert weitergehen. Das slow down klingt auch so, als wäre arbeiten im ausland was doofes. Present Perfect wie oben.

I learned that
listening to different points of views and sharing these
largely contributes to the work we do and that it is as
important as being able to work individually, which is another
strength I was able to develop further.

  • I have learned, I have been able to … siehe oben
  • sharing them klingt besser

All this can directly be linked to my motivation for going on
exchange.

Those are my main reasons for going on this exchange.

On the other hand it is also important to be informed about
the cultural differences that might influence the tourism
industry and as cross cultural studies, a course that is also
offered by NHTV, is of big interest to me, I not only see it
as a chance to get a first hand experience but also as a
chance to bring my experiences back to Breda to share them
with my fellow students.

  • …industry. As cross cultural studies… (einfacher zu lesen)
  • not only do I see it…
  • first-hand experience

The
NHTV and the three schools of my choice all provide the
perfect foundation for that, as they demand a problem solving
way of working and give you the chance to apply what you learn
in classroom.

  • problem-solving … give me … what I have learned
    Sprich über DICH. es geht um DEINE motivation. Zeiten siehe oben.

Choosing Hong Kong and the United States of America as my
destinations followed the fact, that they both are very
important market players within tourism.

I have chosen … because both play an important role in tourism.

The continent of Asia sees the 2nd most tourist arrivals
worldwide, right after Europe.

Asia has the second (!!!) highest number of tourist arrivals worldwide, followed by Europe.

What makes it even more
important is the very high growth rate of over 10% which makes
it the 2nd fastest growing destination.

  • growth of … what?
  • second fastest

Another reason for me to choose Hong Kong as my top
destination is Asia’s leading edge position in the aviation
market, which I want to specialize on during my studies.

  • favourite destination (hattest du das schon erwähnt? du schreibst anotherreason … bin zu faul zum nachgucken)
  • leading EDGE position??
  • das which ist ohne eindeutigen bezugspunkt
  • specialize in

With carriers like Singapore Airlines, Asia was able to set
new standards and trends.

  • has been able to

On the other hand the United States of America are within the
top 3 when it comes to tourism expenditures and the number of
outbound tourists created which gives them an undeniable
strength within the market.

  • …and the number of tourist departures, which …

This shows that I see my future in tourism within an
international surrounding, preferably in the aviation
industry.

  • Logikfehler: This shows… Nö, zeigt es nicht. This is why I see… funktioniert.

Going on exchange is not a one-sided process.

  • on an exchange

I am very keen on giving my future fellow students an insight
into my culture and knowledge to let them profit from my
presence. I am also very keen on satisfying the exchange
institution as well as the NHTV. I will achieve that with high
commitment and by showing that I can relate to people easily
and that I can adapt to new surroundings quickly.

  • I am very keen on giving my future fellow students an insight into my culture. (Punkt. Was hier fehlt m.E. wirklich weglassen, klingt mir auch für diese Art Brief etwas zu abgehoben. Mag aber mein Geschmack sein.) I am determined to show high commitment and make use of my ability to easily relate to people and quickly adapt to new surroundings.

Die Franzi

5

Hi!

@and having seen your presentation I am convinced to have made the right decision for me.

Das ist Denglisch

Wie Elke bereits gefragt hat AE oder BE?

Do you Know Basic English Grammar?

http://esl.about.com/library/weekly/aa110698.htm

An den UP halte Dich besser an Elkes Tipps.

Gruß und viel Erfolg

6

An den UP halte Dich besser an Elkes Tipps.

was meinst du mit UP ?

Hier mal der neue Text. Freue mich schon auf weitere hilfreiche Antworten.
Viele Grüße

Dear Mr Bravo Madrid,

Your exchange brochure and the experience reports have been of great interest to me, and having seen your presentation I am convinced to have made the right decision for me.
As a foreign first year student of international tourism and leisure management I have already had the chance to experience studying and living in a foreign environment. It has shown me how important it is to be open-minded but also that a considerable amount of interest in the country and culture I come from exists. This exchange of differences and knowledge was and still is one of the main factors influencing my personality and my abilities. Working in an international atmosphere and benefitting from it instead of letting it slow you down is a skill I have developed, not only for group assignments but also for my daily life within the Netherlands and anywhere else. I have learned that listening to different points of views and sharing them largely contributes to the work we do and that it is as important as being able to work individually, which is another strength I have been able to develop further.
All this can directly be linked to my motivation for going on exchange.

Within the tourism industry, every single international experience you make is an advantage, as it helps you to widen your horizon. Knowing about different trends and different approaches regions, countries or even continents and their schools take towards tourism is essential in this globally linked market.
On the other hand it is also important to be informed about the cultural differences that might influence the tourism industry. As cross cultural studies, a course that is also offered by NHTV, is of big interest to me, not only do I see it as a chance to get a first-hand experience but also as a chance to bring my experiences back to Breda to share them with my fellow students.

For my personal and academic future I want to develop the skills, knowledge and behaviors that are necessary to perform as a confident, independent person and as an active learner who is able to work individually as well as in groups. The NHTV and the three schools of my choice all provide the perfect foundation for that, as they demand a problem-solving way of working and give me the chance to apply what I have learned in classroom.

I have chosen Hong Kong and the United States of America as my destinations because both play an important role in tourism.
The continent of Asia has the second highest number of tourist arrivals worldwide, right after Europe. What makes it even more important is the 10% growth rate of the number of tourist arrivals, which makes it the second fastest growing destination.
Another reason for me to choose Hong Kong as my favourite destination is Asia’s leading edge position in the aviation market, the market I want to specialize in during my studies. With carriers like Singapore Airlines, Asia has been able to set new standards and trends.
On the other hand the United States of America are within the top 3 when it comes to tourism expenditures and the number of outbound tourists, which gives them an undeniable strength within the market.
This is why I see my future in tourism within an international surrounding, preferably in the aviation industry.

Going on an exchange is not a one-sided process. It is not only about getting new experiences yourself, it is also about sharing your experiences with others.
I am very keen on giving my future fellow students an insight into my culture to let them profit from my presence. I am also very keen on satisfying the exchange institution as well as the NHTV. I am determined to show high commitment and make use of my ability to easily relate to people and quickly adapt to new surroundings.

An exchange to one of my chosen destinations will enhance my profile and I look forward to hear from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

7

Hi,

und fast hatte ich dich schon vermisst…

Deine Antwort nehme ich als Kompliment (falls der beschriebene Dein einziger Kritikpunkt ist), denn der von Dir beschriebene Unterschied ist gar nicht grundlegend, sondern einer, den man erst mitten im studium zu beherrschen lernt (in ESL), und da auch nur passiv und nicht aktiv. Wenn mich ein Student direkt gefragt hätte, hätt ich es gewusst, aber so direkt nicht. Warum? Weil es unfair ist, Lernenden solche Variationen parallel anzubieten un zu sagen „beides geht“. Das verwirrt. Das schöne am Englischen ist ja, dass man verstanden wird, auch wenn man in der Verwendung beides mischt. Der Lernende muss aber den Sinn beider formen kennen, deswegen triezt man sie auf das Present perfect. Außer, man gehört zu den Vertretern der kommunikativen Schule und glaubt, dass Grammatik eh wurscht ist.

sich über ihr Weihnachtsgeschenk freuend,

Die Franzi

8

Hi

@Wenn mich ein Student direkt gefragt hätte, hätt ich es gewusst, aber so direkt nicht

Ich habe leider keine Ahnung was Du meinst.

Gruß

9

Hi Schwadi,

du bist der UP- Ursprungs Poster :wink:

Wir sagen KISS = Keep It Short Stupid, also keine langen Schachtelsätze.

Your exchange brochure and the experience reports have been of
great interest to me, and having seen your presentation I am
convinced to have made the right decision for me.

Das ist Denglisch. Nur Deutsche die kein Englisch können würden so schreiben.

Also nochmal von vorne:

Dear X

I think your exchange brochure and the experience reports are really interesting. I saw your presentation and now I am convinced I have made the right decision.

As a foreign first year student of international tourism and leisure management I have already had the chance to experience studying and living in a foreign environment. ( Wo? und was war da?)

It has shown me how important it is to be open-minded but also that a considerable amount of interest in the country and culture I come from exists. This exchange of differences and knowledge was and still is one of the main factors influencing my personality and my abilities. Working in an international atmosphere and benefiting from it instead of letting it slow you down ( was möchtest Du da sagen?)
is a skill I have developed, not only for group assignments but also for my daily life within the Netherlands and in other countries (wo?).

I have learned that listening to different points of views and sharing them largely contributes to the work we do and that it is as important as being able to work individually, which is another strength I have been able to develop further. (Wo und wie?)

All this can directly be linked to my motivation for going on *an* exchange.

Within the tourism industry, every single international experience you make is an advantage, as it helps you to widen your horizon. Knowing about different trends and different approaches regions, countries or even continents and their schools take towards tourism is essential in this globally linked market.

On the other hand it is also important to be informed about the cultural differences that might influence the tourism industry. „As I am very interested in“ cross cultural studies, a course that is also offered by NHTV, not only do I see it as a chance to get a first-hand experience but also as a chance to bring my experiences back to Breda to share them with my fellow students.

For my personal and academic future I want/ *besser would like* to develop the skills, knowledge and behavior/Besser *behaviour* wenn BE/ that are necessary to perform as a confident, independent person and as an active learner who is able to work individually as well as in groups. The NHTV and the three schools of my choice all provide the perfect foundation for that, as they demand a problem-solving way of working and give me the chance to apply what I have already learned.
würde ich weglassen Dein (in classroom.)

Going on an exchange is not a one-sided process. It is not only about obtaining new experiences yourself; it is also about sharing your experiences with others.

I am very keen on giving my future fellow students an insight into my culture to let them profit from my presence. I am also very keen on satisfying the exchange institution as well as the NHTV. I am determined to show high commitment and make use of my ability to easily relate to people and quickly adapt to new surroundings.

An exchange to one of my chosen destinations will enhance my knowledge and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

xy

Irgendwie fehlt mir da noch das persönliche- wo warst Du im Ausland etc?

Viel Erfolg

Liebe Grüße
Siân

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OT
Sian -

In the States, KISS stands for „Keep it simple, stupid“ (or some-times „…simple and short“ or other variations, but I’ve only heard the first S as referring to „simple“).

  • KIM
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Hi,

@Wenn mich ein Student direkt gefragt hätte, hätt ich es
gewusst, aber so direkt nicht

Deinen Link … die Verwendung von Present Perfect bzw. Simple Past im amerikanischen und britischen Englisch.

Die Franzi

12

cheers :smile:

13

Kennt sich von euch auch jemand inhaltlich mit dem letter of motivation aus ?
Wie auch von euch gesagt wurde bin ich mir nicht sicher ob es persönlich genug wirkt. Ich hab zwar den kompletten text persönlich geschrieben aber vlt wird es nicht so deutlich beim lesen. Ich versuche dabei natürlich auch konkret auf die tourismus industrie einzugehen.
was wären eure letzten tips bevor ich ihn abgebe ?
dann kann ich ihn über die letzten ferientage noch perfektionieren :smile:

so sieht er momentan aus (viel getan hat sich nichtmehr):

Dear Mr x y,

I read your exchange brochure and the experience reports with great interest and I am now convinced I have made the right decision.

As one of NHTV’s foreign first year student of international tourism and leisure management I have already had the chance to experience studying and living in a foreign environment.
It has shown me how important it is to be open-minded but also that a considerable amount of interest in the country and culture I come from exists. This exchange of differences and knowledge was and still is one of the main factors influencing my personality and my abilities.
Working in an international atmosphere and benefiting from it by widening your horizon instead of letting it slow you down is a skill I have developed, not only for group assignments but also for my daily life within the Netherlands and for my last stays in other countries like the United States. I have learned that listening to different points of views and sharing them largely contributes to the work we do and that it is as important as being able to work individually, which is a strength NHTV’s independent way of learning has helped me to develop further.
Summarized, the ability to live and work with other people, in multicultural environments, in positions where communication is important and situations where teamwork as well as individual work is essential are my strengths.
All this can directly be linked to my motivation for going on an exchange.

Within the tourism industry, every single international experience you make is an advantage, as it helps you to widen your horizon.
Knowing about different trends and different approaches regions, countries or even continents and their schools take towards tourism is essential in this globally linked market.
On the other hand it is also important to be informed about the cultural differences that might influence the tourism industry. As I am very interested in cross cultural studies, a course that is also offered by NHTV, not only do I see it as a chance to get a first-hand experience but also as a chance to bring my experiences back to Breda to share them with my fellow students.

For my personal and academic future I would like to develop the skills, knowledge and behaviours that are necessary to perform as a confident, independent person and as an active learner who is able to work individually as well as in groups. The NHTV and the three schools of my choice all provide the perfect foundation for that, as they demand a problem-solving way of working and give me the chance to apply what I have already learned.

I have chosen Hong Kong and the United States of America as my destinations because both play an important role in tourism and because, especially Hong Kong, is a destination with high cultural differences.
The continent of Asia has the second highest number of tourist arrivals worldwide, right after Europe. What makes it even more important is the 10% growth rate of the number of tourist arrivals, which makes it the second fastest growing destination.
Another reason for me to choose Hong Kong as my favourite destination is Asia’s leading edge position in the aviation market, the market I want to specialize in during my studies. With carriers like Singapore Airlines, Asia has been able to set new standards and trends.
On the other hand the United States of America are within the top three when it comes to tourism expenditures and the number of outbound tourists, which gives them an undeniable strength within the market.
This is why I see my future in tourism within an international surrounding, preferably in the aviation industry.

Going on an exchange is not a one-sided process. It is not only about obtaining new experiences yourself; it is also about sharing your experiences with others.
I am very keen on giving my future fellow students an insight into my culture to let them profit from my presence. I am also very keen on satisfying the exchange institution as well as the NHTV. I am determined to show high commitment and to make use of my ability to easily relate to people and quickly adapt to new surroundings.

An exchange to one of my chosen destinations will enhance my knowledge and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

14

Hi Schwadi

Kennt sich von euch auch jemand inhaltlich mit dem letter of
motivation aus ?

Ich habe viele korrigiert/übersetzt- mit Erfolg.

Wie auch von euch gesagt wurde bin ich mir nicht sicher ob es
persönlich genug wirkt. Ich hab zwar den kompletten text
persönlich geschrieben aber vlt wird es nicht so deutlich beim
lesen. Ich versuche dabei natürlich auch konkret auf die
tourismus industrie einzugehen.
was wären eure letzten tips bevor ich ihn abgebe ?
dann kann ich ihn über die letzten ferientage noch
perfektionieren :smile:

Bei deinem fehlen IMHO die persönlichen Erfahrungen. Wo warst Du denn? etc

Hatte ich aber schon geschrieben.

Verein/Persönliches Engagement/Auslandserfahrung

Viel Glück

15

Verein/Persönliches Engagement/Auslandserfahrung

langt es nicht wenn der CV dies abdeckt ?

16

Hallo,

Verein/Persönliches Engagement/Auslandserfahrung

langt es nicht wenn der CV dies abdeckt ?

Gerade die Auslandserfahrung würde ich in einem Satz (oder mehreren, wenn es sich rentiert) einfließen lassen. Wenn Verein/pers. Engagement für die spezielle Bewerbung etwas bringt - auch einfließen lassen.

Gruß
Elke