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Hallo @all =)

ich muss diesen Mittwoch eine kleine Presentation halten und ich habe einige Schwierigkeiten mit der englischen Grammatik. Ich hoffe ihr könnt mit helfen =)

Presentation

Let me begin by explaining our poster. We cut out a circle, like the earth. On the background we draw a map from the USA and mark California; because our text is about the Governor from California were Arnold Schwarzenegger. (Name) tells you more now.

First I would like to tell you something about the Kyoto Protocol.
The Kyoto Protocol is an international agreement which were from the UN United Nations Framework Convention on Climate Change (in short form UNFCCC), their aim is to reach the world wide climate change and whose consequences to reduce or suppress.

Governor Arnold Schwarzenegger sign this new law, in marked contrast to George W. Bush. He refused this Protocol; it?s because he was scared about that the American jobs would be lost.

Other business leaders fear that it could hurt the industry in California, and even force businesses to leave. (Wie kann man diesen Satz umschreiben)?


Thank you for your attention.
Do you have any questions?

Hi!

Presentation 

Good morning!

Please let me begin by explaining our poster. We have cut out a circle, like the earth. On the background we have drawn a map of the USA and marked California; because our text is about the Governor of California, Arnold Schwarzenegger. (Name) will give you some more information now 

First I would like to tell you something about the Kyoto Protocol. 
The Kyoto Protocol is an international agreement achieved at the UN United Nations Framework Convention on Climate Change (in short form UNFCCC), their aim is to control the world wide climate change (?) and to reduce or suppress its consequences.

Governor Arnold Schwarzenegger signed this new law, in marked contrast to George W. Bush. He refused to sign it, because he was scared that the American jobs could be lost. 

Additionally other business leaders fear that it could harm the industry in California, and may even force businesses to leave.

Thank you very much for your attention. 
Do you have any questions?

LG
Sin

Hallo
ergänzend noch folgendes:

Let me begin by explaining our poster. We cut out a circle,
like the earth.

Das würde ich SO nicht lassen.Man könnte sich fragen: Hat die Erde auch einen Kreis ausgeschnitten ?
Vorschlag: …a circle, symbolizing the earth…

Governor Arnold Schwarzenegger sign this new law, in marked
contrast to George W. Bush. He refused this Protocol;

Auch hier eine Unklarheit, Vorschlag: …in contrast to George W. Bush, who refused…ODER: in contrast to George W. Bush. The latter refused…
Viel Erfolg !
P.S.:Habe in deinen Zitaten jetzt nichts korrigiert, weil sin das schon perfekt erledigt hatte

Dankeschön :smile:
das hat mich ein stück weitergebracht :smile:

Wow, das habe ich nicht erwartet :smile:
Vielen, vielen, vielen Dank :smile:

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