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#1

Liebe/-r Experte/-in,
Liebe/-r Experte/-in,
Guten Tag,
das Topic ist die Überschrift. Man sollte mit Critical Thinking einen Essay, about 500 words, verfassen. Ich hoffe, dass ist mir gelungen. Vielleicht würden Sie drüberschauen, Fehler sollten ausgebessert worden sein.#Vielen herzlichen Dank. Ich wünsche noch einen schönen Abend.

Can raising a child gender neutral prepare them effectively for the ´real´ life?

Not everybody, but most people want children. The time come and the woman is pregnant. The first thing that you and your girlfriend/boyfriend or wife/husband are thinking about is, if it is a boy or a girl. That is a thing that everybody want know, your family, friends. How should we name it? And there is also the question if it is possible to prepare it effectively for the ´real´ life by raising a child gender neutral.
I think it is not possible to raise up a child without knowing his gender. You can look in the birth certificate and other documents where the doctor wrote down the gender. One of the first things that are done, after a child is born to check the sex. It is possible to test, when she is pregnant, if it is a boy or a girl. If the parents knew it they can prepare everything (e.g. buy cloth, toys). But if they do not know, what should they do? It is expensive to buy girls and boys stuff, not knowing it the child would play with it.
Another fact is that a child decide which toy it prefers. Studies have shown that boys prefer cars and stuff like that and girls dolls. The child select exactly the toys that fits to it´s gender. A gender neutral child can wear boy or girl clothes, e.g., and that is disgusting. When it enters school and other children see it, what will they think. I´m sure, that they will laugh at that child and that can have bad influences at him/her. Parents can´t prepare the child to face these problems. Later that can cause psychological consequences that nobody can predict. No parents, they care about the child and protect it from any danger, want to expose it to that.
It is the nature of humans to compare themselves with others. Everybody want to be something special. A genderless child is something special, for sure. That causes envy. And envy work hand in hand with despite. There is a family, that have that special thing, a genderless child, other families want to have that to. So they can have that too. There will be so many changes in the daily life. I can´t image what kind of changes that will be. It is a topic nobody is able to write the right thing. There is no experience.
In the end I can say, that a child is not an experiment. You can´t predict what will happen and the outcome can be fatal. Changes are always good. But you should leave things as they are when they are good and history told us that the way they are is the best way. You should not leave these path.

#2

Hi!
Ich habe deinen Text rein auf Englisch überprüft und entsprechende Fehler korrigiert. Achtung bei der 3. Person Singular Präsens, da kommt immer ein „s“ nach dem Verb, e.g. he drives versus e.g. 1. Person Singular Präsens „I drive“
Aufpassen dass die Sprache nicht zu sehr nach gesprochener Sprache klingt. „stuff“ hat in einem Essay nichts verloren.
Was das Critical Thinking/Inhalt allgemein angeht: ich habe hier nichts korrigiert.
Was ein Leser aber im allgemeinen nicht versteht ist, was du mit gender-neutral meinst. Allgmein ist das ja nicht möglich, da Eltern ja ihr Kind wickeln müssen, dann wissen die das Geschlecht ja sowieso. Der Teil steht auf etwas wackeligen Beinen.
Hier aber die korrigierte Fassung deines Textes:

Can raising a child gender neutrally prepare it effectively for real life?

Not everybody, but most people want children. Once the time comes and the woman is pregnant. The first thing that you and your girlfriend/boyfriend or wife/husband are thinking about is, whether it will be a boy or a girl. That is something everybody wants to know, both your family and your friends. How should be its name? Anther question that arises is, whether it will be possible to better prepare it for real life by raising the child gender neutrally. I think it is not possible to raise a child without knowing his/her gender. You can look in the birth certificate and other documents where the doctor wrote down the gender. One of the first things that are done after a child is born is to check the sex. It is even possible to test, when the mother is pregnant, if it will be a boy or a girl. If the parents know it, they can better prepare for the child’s birth. (e.g. buy suitable cloths, toys). But if they do not know, what should they do? It is expensive to buy both girls and boys stuff, not knowing whether will play with it at all. Another fact is that a child decides which toys it prefers. Studies have shown that boys prefer cars and girls tend to go for dolls. The child selects exactly the toys that fit to it´s gender. A gender-neutral child can wear boy or girl clothes. When it enters school and other children see it, what will they think? I´m sure that they will laugh at that child and that this could have bad influences at him/her. Parents can´t prepare the child to face these problems. Later that can cause psychological consequences that nobody can predict. No parent would want to expose his/her kid to this because they care about their child and would want to protect it from any danger.
It is the nature of humans to compare themselves with others. Everybody wants to be something special. A genderless child is something special, for sure. That causes envy. And envy works hand in hand with despite. There is a family that has that special thing, a genderless child. Other families might want to have that too. There will be so many changes in the daily life. I can´t image what kind of changes that will be. It is a topic nobody is able to write the right things about. There is no experience.
In the end I can say, that a child is not an experiment. You can´t predict what will happen and the outcome can be fatal. Changes are always good. But one should leave things as they are when they are good and history has told us that the way they are is best. One should not leave this path.

Ich hoffe, das ist hilfreich.
Enjoy your evening!!

btw, I’ve counted, the text is still below 500 words

#3

Lieber Andreas,

ich habe angefangen, Ihren Text zu korrigieren, möchte Sie aber nun stattdessen lieber darauf hinweisen, daß Sie nicht verstanden zu haben scheinen, was „gender neutral“ bedeutet. Es bedeutet z.B. durchaus nicht, einem Jungen ein Prinzessinnenkleid anzuziehen.
Mit freundlichen Grüßen,
Susanne Walter

#4

Liebe/-r Experte/-in,
Liebe/-r Experte/-in,
Guten Tag,
das Topic ist die Überschrift. Man sollte mit Critical
Thinking einen Essay, about 500 words, verfassen. Ich hoffe,
dass ist mir gelungen. Vielleicht würden Sie drüberschauen,
Fehler sollten ausgebessert worden sein.#Vielen herzlichen
Dank. Ich wünsche noch einen schönen Abend.

Hallo Andreas,
der Text ist verständlich, wenn auch holperig und typisch „deutsch-englisch“. Einige Fehler (Singular/Plural etc.) habe ich ausgebessert, Stil und Wortwahl nicht verbessert.
Viele Grüße,
Ferdi

Can raising a child gender-neutral prepare them effectively
for the ´real´ life?

Not everybody, but most people want children. The time comes
and the woman is pregnant. The first thing that you and your
girlfriend/boyfriend or wife/husband are thinking about is if
it is a boy or a girl. That is something that everybody wants to
know, your family, friends. How should we name it? And there
is also the question if it is possible to prepare it
effectively for the ´real´ life by raising a child gender-neutral.
I think it is not possible to raise up a child without knowing
his gender. You can look in the birth certificate and other
documents where the doctor recorded the gender. One of the
first things that are done after a child is born is to check its
sex. It is possible to test, when she is pregnant, if it is a
boy or a girl. If the parents knew it they can prepare
everything (e.g. buy cloth, toys). But if they do not know,
what should they do? It is expensive to buy girls and boys
stuff, not knowing if the child would play with it.
Another fact is that a child decides which toy it prefers.
Studies have shown that boys prefer cars and stuff like that
and girls dolls. The child selects exactly the toys that fit
to its gender. A gender-neutral child can wear boy or girl
clothes, e.g., and that is disgusting. When it enters school
and other children see it, what will they think. I´m sure,
that they will laugh at that child and that can have bad
influences at him/her. Parents can´t prepare the child to face
these problems. Later that can cause psychological
consequences that nobody can predict. If parents care
about the child and protect it from any danger they wouldn’t want to expose it to that.
It is the nature of humans to compare themselves with others.
Everybody wants to be something special. A genderless child is
something special, for sure. That causes envy. And envy works
hand in hand with despite. There is a family, that have that
special thing, a genderless child, other families want to have
that too. So they can have that too. There will be so many
changes in the daily life. I cannot imagine what kind of changes
that will be. It is a topic nobody is able to write the right
thing. There is no experience.
In the end I can say, that a child is not an experiment. You
can´t predict what will happen and the outcome can be fatal.
Changes are always good. But you should leave things as they
are when they are good and history told us that the way they
are is the best way. You should not leave this path.

#5

Lieber Fragesteller,

Ich fürchte, das Ausmaß der nötigen Korrekturen übersteigt die Zeit, die ich mal eben aufbringen kann. Hier geht es nicht um ein paar Rechtschreibfehler, sondern um Umstellung ganzer Sätze wegen Grammatik etc. Viele Fehler lassen sich aber schon mit der Regel ‚he, she, it, das s muß mit‘ beheben!

Ich kenne zwar die geplante Anwendung nicht, möchte aber zum Inhalt sagen, daß die Argumente doch recht wacklig sind. Wenn z. B. Studien zitiert werden, müssen Quellenangaben her.
Damit ließe sich der Text deutlich verbessern!

Viel Erfolg und frohe Feiertage!

#6

Habe Aenderungen mit ** markiert. When weiter nichts steht einfach die * wegnehmen. Falls Du was loeschen oder ganz aenern musst habe ich das in () dahinter geschrieben. Wichtig ‚das Kind‘ ist NICHT saechlich in Englisch. Kinder sind entweder maennlich oder weiblich. Daher ist ‚it‘ generell falsch. Wenn man also ueber ein Kind redet wo man das Geschlecht nicht kennt muss man ‚he/she‘ bzw. ‚him/her‘ benutzen und nicht ‚it‘ oder Substantive wie z.B. ‚the child‘, ‚the kid‘, ‚the baby‘

Can raising a child gender neutral prepare them effectively
for the ´real´ life?

Not everybody, but most people want children. The time come*s*
and the woman is pregnant. The first thing that you and your
girlfriend/boyfriend or wife/husband are thinking about is, if
it is a boy or a girl. That is a thing that everybody want*s to*
know, your family, friends. How should we name it *(this sounds bad, consider writing ‚the child‘ or ‚him/her‘ instead of ‚it‘, the same applies later on)*? And there
is also the question if it is possible to prepare it
effectively for the ´real´ life by raising a child gender
neutral.
I think it is not possible to raise up a child without knowing
his*/her* gender. You can look in*at (not ‚in‘)* the birth certificate and other
documents where the doctor wrote down the gender. One of the
first things that are done, after a child is born *is* to check the
sex. It is possible to test, when she is pregnant *(this also sounds awkward because you where talking about the child until now, consider writing ‚the woman‘ insead of ‚she‘ or rephrase it to ‚during pregnancy‘)*, if it is a
boy or a girl. If the parents knew it they can*could (not ‚can‘)* prepare
everything (e.g. buy cloth, toys). But if they do not know,
what should they do? It is expensive to buy girls and boys
stuff, not knowing it the child would play with it.
Another fact is that a child decide*s* which toy it prefers.
Studies have shown that boys prefer cars and stuff like that
and girls dolls. The child select*s* exactly the toys that fits*fit (no s here)*
to it´s gender. A gender neutral child can wear boy or girl
clothes, e.g., and that is disgusting. When it enters school
and other children see it, what will they think.*? (no ‚.‘)* I´m sure,
that they will laugh at that child and that can have bad
influences at him/her. Parents can´t prepare the child to face
these problems. Later that can cause psychological
consequences that nobody can predict. No parents, they*who (‚they‘ is out of context here)* care
about the*ir* child and protect it from any danger, want to expose
it to that.
It is the nature of humans to compare themselves with others.
Everybody want to be something special. A genderless child is
something special, for sure. That causes envy. And envy work*s*
hand in hand with despite. There is a family, that have that
special thing, a genderless child, other families want to have
that to. So they can have that too. There will be so many
changes in the daily life. I can´t image what kind of changes
that will be. It is a topic nobody is able to write the right
thing *about*. There is no experience.
In the end I can say, that a child is not an experiment. You
can´t predict what will happen and the outcome can be fatal.
Changes are always good. But you should leave things as they
are when they are good and history told us that the way they
are is the best way. You should not leave these*this (not these)* path.

#7

Hallo Andreas,

hier ist Dein Text mit einigen Änderungsvorschlägen.
Leider ist es mir nicht gelungen, die überarbeiteten Stellen zu kennzeichnen, deshalb müsstest Du beide Versionen (deine und meine) noch mal vergleichen, um die Änderungen zu erkennen.

Herzliche Grüße von Wilma

Can raising a child in a gender neutral atmosphere prepare the child effectively for ´real´ life?

Not everybody, but most people want to have children. The time come and the woman is pregnant. The first thing that you and your girlfriend/boyfriend or wife/husband are thinking about is, if it is a boy or a girl. That is a thing that everybody wants to know, your family, friends. How should we name it? And there also is the question if it is possible to prepare the child effectively for ´real´ life by raising it in a gender neutral atmosphere.
I think it is not possible to raise a child without knowing his gender. You can look in the birth certificate and other documents stating the gender. One of the first things that are done after a child is born is to check the sex. A test to find out whether the child is a boy or a girl is even possible during pregnancy. If the parents know it they can prepare everything (e.g. buy cloth, toys). But if they do not know, what should they do? It is expensive to buy girls and boys stuff, not knowing if the child would play with it.
Another fact is that a child decides what kind of toys it prefers. Studies have shown that boys prefer cars and stuff like that and girls dolls. The child selects exactly the toys that fit to its gender. A gender neutral child can wear boy or girl clothes, e.g., and that is disgusting (???). When it enters school and other children see it, what will they think. I´m sure, that they will laugh at that child and that can have bad influence at him/her. Parents can´t prepare the child to face these problems that may later on result in unpredictable psychological problems. No parents who care about the child and protect it from any danger want to expose it to that.
It is the nature of humans to compare themselves to others. Everybody wants to be something special. A genderless child is something special, for sure. That causes envy. And envy work hand in hand with despite (???). There is a family having that special thing, a genderless child, other families want to have that too. So they can have it too. There will be so many changes in the daily life. I can´t image what kind of changes that will be. It is a topic nobody is able to write the right thing. There is no experience.
In the end I can say, that a child is not an experiment. You can´t predict what will happen and the outcome can be fatal. Changes are always good. But you should leave things as they are when they are good and history told us that the way they are is the best way. You should not leave these path.

#8

danke