Motivation-Letter English

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Dear Sir or Madam,

You are looking for a innovative personality with a high motivation how masterly assign priorities. I am seeking to leverage my experiences in the field of marketing and sales at the management level of your highly professional ECM-World. I was excited to learn, your company is currently seeking a marketing manager for CH/ A - I would very much like to be considered as a strong candidate.

Ideally, the position would allowed me the opportunity to utilize my experiences gained as an area manager since the date of founding the new brand management of xxx I managed my field independently and in full responsibility to all marketing strategies, implement campaigns and in the lead of sales, incl. budget management. Regarding to my management diploma of culture marketing at private school SAWI, it increases creative success to innovative communication projects, even as my F-/E-Skills I use daily. At the company xxx, I’v had the opportunity to lead ECM solutions for the new lindt-e-World. Includes the homepage and specially the inductions of the new eShop with SAP Interface technology for the counties CH/ F/ D/ S in terms of CMS, CRM and DMS, based on ISO 9001 certification.

For your convenience, i have attached my CV as a review. Realizing the limitation of the writing page, i would welcome the opportunity to participate in a personal interview to answer any of your questions and better present my qualifications.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to speaking with you soon.

Hallo pinkheart,

der brief hat generell eine sehr komplexe Satzstellung …
da ich auch kein Muttersprachler bin, kann ich nur ein paar hinweise geben.

Kann mir bitte jemand diesen Brief kurz durchlesen und ein
Feedback geben? Ganz lieben Dank.

Dear Sir or Madam,

You are looking for a innovative personality with a high
motivation how masterly assign priorities.

You are looking for an innovative…
how masterly assign priosrities ( hier vertseh ich nicht, was du sagen willst?.)

I am seeking to

leverage my experiences in the field of marketing and sales at
the management level of your highly professional ECM-World.

statt leverage lieber expand/ extend.

I

was excited to learn, your company is currently seeking a
marketing manager for CH/ A - I would very much like to be
considered as a strong candidate.

very much like … das ist zuviel! I would like…, aber der Satz ansich find ich nicht so gut. Was willst du sagen?

Ideally, the position would allowed me the opportunity to
utilize my experiences gained as an area manager since the
date of founding the new brand management of xxx I managed my
field independently and in full responsibility to all
marketing strategies, implement campaigns and in the lead of
sales, incl. budget management.

Ideally raus! the position would give the opportunity…nach area manager ein neuer satz! und dann was du gemacht/ geelrnt hast separat…

Regarding to my management

diploma of culture marketing at private school SAWI, it
increases creative success to innovative communication
projects, even as my F-/E-Skills I use daily.

??? Direkt anfangen : I obtained a diploma in xxxx at xxx. The diploma prepared me for innovative…
even as my skills I use daily ???

At the company

xxx, I’v had the opportunity to lead ECM solutions for the new
lindt-e-World. Includes the homepage and specially the
inductions of the new eShop with SAP Interface technology for
the counties CH/ F/ D/ S in terms of CMS, CRM and DMS, based
on ISO 9001 certification.

The project included the homepage … with xxx, for xxx, in terms of xxx, based on xxx (das ist zuviel geschachtelte Information…entweder auf das wichtigste beschränken oder neuer Satz)

For your convenience, i have attached my CV as a review.

I have attached my CV to give you some details about myself (vielleicht findest du hier noch gängige floskeln im netz).

Realizing the limitation of the writing page, i would welcome
the opportunity to participate in a personal interview to
answer any of your questions and better present my
qualifications.

???

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to
speaking with you soon.

Hm, schau mal hier gibt es viele Tipps und Beispiele, wie man sich vorstellt:

http://jobsearch.about.com/od/coverlettersamples/a/l…
http://www.resumecoverletterexamples.com/
http://www.career.vt.edu/JobSearchGuide/CoverLetterS…

viele Grüße,

Sasa